Lee otherwise known as Luke Garner, is a young man whom until recently was a “illegal”. A illegal in this story is a cat dog or any third plus child; they have this rule because in this fiction the population is to great and rations aren’t enough to uphold the whole population if it keeps growing. His character is that of a supporting character in the beginning since he was just pushed around or had to be told how to act. Even though he was considered a legal child he still kept a fear and sadness for he missed his real family, no matter his yearning to go to school his fear overcame his desire and was too great to bring a happy moment for him to relax.
As the story progresses he is bullied by his roommates and feels hurt but looks forward to change and adaption to his new scenario, though he still acts cautious for there might be bugs planted with the school which if discovered means his death. With a note from mr. Talbot which just said “blend in” he had lost his hope for most part, but stuck to the words he was given as held a bitter side for them. Trying to be daring he observes his roommates (and school building), but in fear they may look back he keeps to himself since his heart wasn’t ready to truly confront people outside of the 6 he knows.
The woods were the only thing bringing him closer to his home which he missed dearly even though he had to hide his whole life. He went there weekly in secret and tried to escape into his world of thought and plan to escape his school. But one day to his amazement he found a group of illegal children like him and thought he was suspected he found piece within there ranks because he had lost jen and being with them replaced his sadness.
if i did it wrong i can do it again...
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ReplyDeleteLee otherwise known as Luke Garner, is a young man whom until recently was a “illegal”. A illegal in this story is a cat dog or any third plus child; they have this rule because in this fiction the population is to great and rations aren’t enough to uphold the whole population if it keeps growing. His character is that of a supporting character in the beginning since he was just pushed around or had to be told how to act. Even though he was considered a legal child he still kept a fear and sadness for he missed his real family, no matter his yearning to go to school his fear overcame his desire and was too great to bring a happy moment for him to relax.
As the story progresses he is bullied by his roommates and feels hurt but looks forward to change and adaption to his new scenario, though he still acts cautious for there might be bugs planted with the school which if discovered means his death. With a note from mr. Talbot which just said “blend in” he had lost his hope for most part, but stuck to the words he was given as held a bitter side for them. Trying to be daring he observes his roommates (and school building), but in fear they may look back he keeps to himself since his heart wasn’t ready to truly confront people outside of the 6 he knows.
The woods were the only thing bringing him closer to his home which he missed dearly even though he had to hide his whole life. He went there weekly in secret and tried to escape into his world of thought and plan to escape his school. But one day to his amazement he found a group of illegal children like him and thought he was suspected he found piece within there ranks because he had lost jen and being with them replaced his sadness.
if i did it wrong i can do it again...
This is an EXCELLENT start, your paragraphs are a little bit too jumpy if you will, they don't smoothly transition. However this definitely pulls me in and makes me want to keep reading
ReplyDeleteNext ime it would be nice if you could give a little more background before you mention names. The fact that Mr. Talbot gave him a note that said “blend in” could mean everything or nothing. What exactly does education have to do with this? What sort of world is this even based? Why are cats and dogs and children in the same category? This looks like an interesting book. It seems to be about staying underground and away from the government. You did just fine.
ReplyDeletethanks joel and why do you sound smarter and more like a adult when you type?!
ReplyDeletenoah thanks next ill start from the beginning, but this is the second book so this is how it started... and i agree with you on the with out back ground knowledge it would mean everything or nothing to a viewer like you, its based on a fiction where its like our world but everyone is over populating and third children are illegal and so are dogs and cats since they eat food too that is why they are in the same category.
well thank you guys for your opinion and noah next it ill do yours
This is really good Stephen! I think you wrote this very good! And you followed the guidelines, which is really all that matters!! Can't wait to read more! :D
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